Hi Miché. Thank you for sharing your post with me. I love your opinion about the realistic problems experienced within the workplaces. Your post is also easy to read and references are formatted correctly. However, here are a few points you could consider when editing your work: I do not see a clear link between the picture and your ethical dillemma. I suggest you choose a more appropriate picture to compliment your work, and then link it’s significance to your work. Also, reflect more on the ethical dillemma, eg, how did it make you feel?, how did you respond?, etc…
Otherwise, I think you’ve touched a very relevant topic.
Hi Miche, thank you for sharing your work. I have read through it and I think it is really good.
I have a few things which I think might be able to help you improve and convey your message better
Grammar:
Line 3 leading into line 4 – A comma and full stop could be useful.
Line 3 – We could maybe substitute some of the current prepositions with “is” and “are”
Clinical experience – Maybe you could elaborate more on how it became an ethical dilemma? Did you maybe ignore the patient after a while? Provide less treatment techniques?
Overall I think it is a good piece as this topic is still relevant in many fields.
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Hi Miché. Thank you for sharing your post with me. I love your opinion about the realistic problems experienced within the workplaces. Your post is also easy to read and references are formatted correctly. However, here are a few points you could consider when editing your work: I do not see a clear link between the picture and your ethical dillemma. I suggest you choose a more appropriate picture to compliment your work, and then link it’s significance to your work. Also, reflect more on the ethical dillemma, eg, how did it make you feel?, how did you respond?, etc…
Otherwise, I think you’ve touched a very relevant topic.
Hi Miche, thank you for sharing your work. I have read through it and I think it is really good.
I have a few things which I think might be able to help you improve and convey your message better
Grammar:
Line 3 leading into line 4 – A comma and full stop could be useful.
Line 3 – We could maybe substitute some of the current prepositions with “is” and “are”
Clinical experience – Maybe you could elaborate more on how it became an ethical dilemma? Did you maybe ignore the patient after a while? Provide less treatment techniques?
Overall I think it is a good piece as this topic is still relevant in many fields.